Ticket #34663: 34663.10.diff

src/wp-admin/about.php

@@ -51 +51 @@
                                 <div class="col">
                                         <h3><?php echo ( 'Introducing Twenty Sixteen' ); ?></h3>
                                         <p><?php echo ( 'Our newest default theme, Twenty Sixteen, is a modern take on a classic blog design.' ); ?></p>
-                                        <p><?php echo ( 'Twenty Sixteen was built with a mobile-first approach, ensuring your site will look great on any device. A harmonious fluid grid, fun color schemes, flexible mast head, and more make this a great addition to the default theme family.' ); ?></p>
+                                        <p><?php echo ( 'Twenty Sixteen was built to look great on any device. A fluid grid design, fun color schemes, a flexible header, and more, will make your content shine.' ); ?></p>
                                         <div class="horizontal-image">
                                                 <div class="content">
                                                         <img class="feature-image horizontal-screen" src="https://cldup.com/J-zxmMqkXs.png" alt="" />
@@ -74 +74 @@
                         </div>
                         <div class="col">
                                 <h3><?php echo ( 'Responsive images' ); ?></h3>
-                                <p><?php echo ( 'WordPress now takes a smarter approach to displaying device-appropriate image sizes, ensuring a perfect fit every time. You don&#8217;t need to do anything to your theme, it just works.' ); ?></p>
+                                <p><?php echo ( 'WordPress now takes a smarter approach to displaying appropriate image sizes on any device, ensuring a perfect fit every time. You don&#8217;t need to do anything to your theme, it just works.' ); ?></p>
                         </div>
                 </div>
 
@@ -85 +85 @@
                                 <div class="embed-container">
                                         <?php echo wp_oembed_get( 'https://make.wordpress.org/core/2015/10/28/new-embeds-feature-in-wordpress-4-4/' ); ?>
                                 </div>
-                                <h3><?php echo ( 'Embeddable WordPress content' ); ?></h3>
-                                <p><?php echo ( 'Now you can embed WordPress content inside of other WordPress content. Simply drop a post URL into the editor and see an instant embed preview, complete with title, excerpt, comment and sharing links, even your site icon.' ); ?></p>
+                                <h3><?php echo ( 'Embed your WordPress content' ); ?></h3>
+                                <p><?php echo ( 'Now you can embed your posts on other sites, even other WordPress sites. Simply drop a post URL into the editor and see an instant embed preview, complete with the title, excerpt, and featured image if you&#8217;ve set one. We&#8217;ll even include your site icon and links for comments and sharing.' ); ?></p>
                         </div>
                         <div class="col">
                                 <div class="embed-container">
                                         <?php echo wp_oembed_get( '' ); ?>
                                 </div>
-                                <h3><?php echo ( 'More third-party embeds' ); ?></h3>
-                                <p><?php echo ( 'If the addition of post embeds weren’t enough, WordPress 4.4 also adds support for five new oEmbed providers: Cloudup, ReverbNation, Reddit&nbsp;Comments, VideoPress, and Speaker&nbsp;Deck.' ); ?></p>
+                                <h3><?php echo ( 'Even more embed providers' ); ?></h3>
+                                <p><?php echo ( 'In addition to post embeds, WordPress 4.4 also adds support for five new oEmbed providers: Cloudup, Reddit&nbsp;Comments, ReverbNation, Speaker&nbsp;Deck, and VideoPress.' ); ?></p>
                         </div>
                 </div>
 
@@ -106 +106 @@
                                 <div class="col">
                                         <h4><?php echo ( 'REST API infrastructure' ); ?></h4>
                                         <div class="two-col-text">
-                                                <p><?php echo ( 'WordPress 4.4 marks the beginning of a new era with integration of infrastructure for the new REST API. The REST API serves to provide developers with a robust path forward for building and extending RESTful APIs on top of WordPress.' ); ?></p>
+                                                <p><?php echo ( 'Infrastructure for the REST API has been integrated into core, marking a new era in developing with WordPress. The REST API serves to provide developers with a path forward for building and extending RESTful APIs on top of WordPress.' ); ?></p>
                                                 <p><?php
                                                         if ( current_user_can( 'install_plugins' ) ) {
                                                                 $url_args = array(
@@ -123 +123 @@
                                                         }
 
                                                         /* translators: WordPress REST API plugin link */
-                                                        printf( ( 'Infrastructure is the first part of a multi-stage rollout for the REST API, which also targets inclusion of core endpoints in an upcoming release. To get a sneak peek of the core endpoints, and for more on extending the REST API, check out the official %s plugin.' ), $plugin_link );
+                                                        printf( ( 'Infrastructure is the first part of a multi-stage rollout for the REST API. Inclusion of core endpoints is targeted for an upcoming release. To get a sneak peek of the core endpoints, and for more information on extending the REST API, check out the official %s plugin.' ), $plugin_link );
                                                 ?></p>
                                         </div>
                                 </div>