Changeset 26763

Timestamp:

12/07/2013 01:17:56 AM (13 years ago)

Author:

iammattthomas

Message:

Copy edits to the About page:

• Open Sans is Open Source, so it can't meet Open Source
• 'icons and graphics' is redundant
• Let's not overuse 'beautiful'
• Choose > pick so we don't use 'choose' twice in the same line

See #26387.

File:

• trunk/src/wp-admin/about.php (modified) (3 diffs)

trunk/src/wp-admin/about.php

@@ -43 +43 @@
                         <img src="images/about-modern-aesthetics.png" />
                         <h3><?php echo ( 'Modern aesthetic' ); ?></h3>
-                        <p><?php echo ( 'The new admin has a fresh, simple design that puts clarity and simplicity ahead of web design flourishes.' ); ?></p>
+                        <p><?php echo ( 'The new admin has a fresh, uncluttered design that puts clarity and simplicity ahead of visual flourishes.' ); ?></p>
                 </div>
                 <div class="col-2">
                         <img src="images/about-typography.png" />
                         <h3><?php echo ( 'Clean typography' ); ?></h3>
-                        <p><?php echo ( 'Open Sans meets Open Source. WordPress&#8217;s new typography is upright, friendly, and optimized for web and mobile interfaces.' ); ?></p>
+                        <p><?php echo ( 'Open Sans is Open Source. Our new typography is simple, friendly, and optimized for web and mobile interfaces.' ); ?></p>
                 </div>
                 <div class="col-3 last-feature">
@@ -64 +64 @@
                 <div>
                         <h3><?php echo ( 'WordPress on every&#160;device' ); ?></h3>
-                        <p><?php echo ( 'Whether you&#8217;re on your smartphone or tablet, your notebook or desktop, WordPress looks beautiful on every device. Now you can update your website wherever you are.' ); ?></p>
+                        <p><?php echo ( 'Whether you&#8217;re on your smartphone or tablet, your notebook or desktop, WordPress looks great on every device. Now you can update your website wherever you are.' ); ?></p>
                         <h4><?php echo ( 'High definition is here' ); ?></h4>
-                        <p><?php echo ( 'WordPress is sharper than ever; vector icons and graphics mean no more blurry edges. You get the best viewing experience no matter what type of device you use.' ); ?></p>
+                        <p><?php echo ( 'WordPress is sharper than ever; vector icons mean no more blurry edges. You get the best viewing experience no matter what type of device you use.' ); ?></p>
                 </div>
                 <div class="last-feature about-colors-img">
@@ -80 +80 @@
                 <div>
                         <h3><?php echo ( 'Pick a color' ); ?></h3>
-                        <p><?php echo ( 'We&#8217;ve included four color schemes so that you can choose your favorite. Don&#8217;t like this striking new admin? Choose from any of the schemes below to change it in an instant.' ); ?></p>
+                        <p><?php echo ( 'We&#8217;ve included four color schemes so that you can pick your favorite. Choose from any of the schemes below to change it in an instant.' ); ?></p>
                         <?php $user_id = get_current_user_id(); ?>
                         <?php if ( count($_wp_admin_css_colors) > 1 && has_action('admin_color_scheme_picker') ) :?>